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  • An Irish Rose

    This is the second in a series of short vignettes. I'm sure many of us have mental images notions about the unseen and the unknowable aspects of Autumn 1888 - for example the killer, his state of mind and his victims' last moments. These are fragments of mine, perhaps a brief glimpse into the shadow world.

    He awoke to pale, mid-afternoon light filtering through a grimy window. Still clothed in a dirty coat and coarse trousers he sat up on the bare mattress. The rotten window frame was soft as cork and the glass rattled as he inched it open. A cold breeze pushed in and stirred the evil stench. Shouts and rumbling cartwheels rose from Dorset Street.

    Standing, he stretched his stiff muscles then turned his bloodshot eyes to the table with its plate and the remnants of a stale loaf. Sitting on a hard chair he scraped it closer to the table. His unwashed hands tore off a wad of bread. As he chewed, his fingers trembled. From the street below came the strains of a sweet sung melody. Instinctively he smiled but the smile turned sour as he thought of his singing, whoring mother. Her brown teeth had showed when she sang. The siren voice trailed off having no doubt attracted its prey. He didn’t trouble to get up and look.

    His gin-soaked bolthole was quiet. He lay on the musty bed and dozed again...

    ... it had grown dark. Somewhere distant a woman screamed and a dog began deep incessant barks. He drifted up through layers of sleep. From upstairs came a muffled cough and heavy boots on worn boards. Instinctively his hand dropped to the floor and he felt beneath the bed. He withdrew a long knife. Propping himself up on one elbow, he pulled a stub of candle and a match from his pocket. He positioned the knife deftly and trimmed the wick quickly and neatly. The match hissed and flared as he scraped it against the bedstead and lit the candle.

    He snuffed the match with leather-hard fingers and began to whittle it. Drawing the blade away from him in slow, gentle strokes he watched the white strips as they curled and fell. Satisfied with his work he used the pick he had fashioned to remove bread from between his teeth. Then with the same implement he absently prised traces of brown from under his nails.

    His ears pricked alert as the familiar Irish voice set up its syrupy sweet singing again. The soft tones lilted in the still air of late evening. Slowly he swung his legs off the bed and stood up, placed the toothpick on the empty plate and slipped the knife in his pocket...

  • #2
    Nice, very well written. But the first suggestion, I think, that the Ripper lived just upstairs from Mary Kelly. There are records, after all, of who lived up there. Also, I'm not positive on this, but Miller's Court wasn't a three-story structure, was it?

    But I understand it's fiction. Again, nicely done.

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    • #3
      Thanks for your kind observations Kensei, it's nice to have feedback. In my mind's eye I see the ripper renting a private room possibly in Dorset Street or close by. Gareth, I believe, unearthed a historic reference to them being offered at 2/6 a week.

      I wanted him to hear Kelly singing in the street from his bolthole but I realise now that isn't clear. Any mention of Kelly, however oblique, is bound to summon the words Miller's Court. Great input thanks very much!

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      • #4
        I did enjoy that read. This is pretty much how I imagine Jack. Please write many more "shorties" and hopefully put a book together one day. I would happily buy your book.

        I like him being Irish too. I have never believed jtr was Jewish.

        Thanks again
        It was Bury whodunnit. The black eyed scoundrel.

        The yam yams are the men, who won't be blamed for nothing..

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        • #5
          Well that's very nice indeed to hear Ashkenaz! I have quite a few of these speculative pieces in which I take morsels of fact and embellish them outrageously. You may like to watch out for them from time to time. At the back of my mind is a general intention to use them as a framework for a piece of fiction based on the Whitechapel Murders.

          This earlier passage is some ideas about Catherine Eddowes last moments. Hope you find it interesting!

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