Here are 4 issues for you to deal with, Kaz, I posted them a few times earlier, but you ignored them, so have another stab:
1) Inconsistent phrasing for the period.
2) Two entirely different styles of handwriting.
3) Mention of a pub that didn't exist.
4) Wording for a listed item that matched the text for the same listed items in a book published a century later.
Have at it, Kaz.